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posted 7th Jun 2011, 1:00 AM

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7th Jun 2011, 1:00 AM

AshLeigh Henson

Holy crap textwall. Here is the first major departure from the first release of The Ley Line War. However, I hope that ultimately it will make the first chapter much more enjoyable, and make the setting far easier to understand.

But please keep in mind, there are elements that are supposed to remain a mystery until later on as well.

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4th Nov 2011, 1:49 PM

AshLeigh Henson

Because I cannot letter to save my life.

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16th Aug 2011, 3:00 PM

Meredith King

Wow, this took five reads to understand what was happening, and the previous two pages were simply establishing shots. I'd suggest reading a bit more on panel layouts and page layouts. The dialouge is very hard to follow, there's nothing wrong with having more than four panels on a page if it helps with pacing and understanding.

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4th Nov 2011, 1:45 PM

Jsoma

Holy crap, is that comic sans?

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